On thursday' class time, Professor Mangini sat with me to discuss my hiraeth project that I had turned in early for review. I was very confident with this draft and wasn't sure what feedback I would receive because I wasn't sure what else could be done to fix it, honestly. However, i am glad he found things that I can work on to revise it. Such as, fixing up my imagery and cleaning my thoughts up a bit more. It is always much more helpful when someone else reads your work. Especially, when they have a degree in that field! I like to take advantage of opportunities like that when they are offered! Once I take his feedback and begin draft number 3, I will be working or my argument based project and turn that in for review as well!
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Over the course of this week, I decided to write another draft for my hiraeth project. After reading it, over and over again, I saw that I really liked what I had written in terms of imagery. I needed to do more about my home that I can't return to, rather than focusing it on my grand father. I wrote an entirely new scene that gave a better sense of my home away from home. The actual home itself. The room specifically, that is part of my hiraeth. it was more difficult to think of memories that he was in, other then the main one I could remember. I was around 7 or 8 years old when he passed away. I'm excited to see what changes can be made to the second draft of my hiraeth and how I can start to make changes to make a third one.
After discussing with my professor about which drafts I wanted to work on, I couldn't decide. I thought the film-based argument was too strong of a controversy to touch on even more so I chose the mindset argument which was a lot harder to write, personally. He kinda persuaded me to lead towards the film-based argument because it was very powerful. He recommended that if I couldn't decide which one to go with, along with the hiraeth project, that I would write a second draft for both of these topics.
Trying to analyze my mindset argument again, was a lot more difficult the second time around. Looking at it again, to see, where it would need a touch up. Not because it is well written, but because I didn't know what else to add to make it sound more interesting. I thought about doing a draft on the film-based argument, and it felt like I had a lot more to say and more researched points that I can add onto it. I can shape up my points to be more argumentative without neglecting the other side of the argument and the facts they include as well. I may continue to do both drafts anyway if I get a brainstorm of ideas. However, I'm going to start with the film-based one first before I jump to the mindset one and still have writers block the day before its due. |
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