Over the course of this week, I decided to write another draft for my hiraeth project. After reading it, over and over again, I saw that I really liked what I had written in terms of imagery. I needed to do more about my home that I can't return to, rather than focusing it on my grand father. I wrote an entirely new scene that gave a better sense of my home away from home. The actual home itself. The room specifically, that is part of my hiraeth. it was more difficult to think of memories that he was in, other then the main one I could remember. I was around 7 or 8 years old when he passed away. I'm excited to see what changes can be made to the second draft of my hiraeth and how I can start to make changes to make a third one.
0 Comments
After discussing with my professor about which drafts I wanted to work on, I couldn't decide. I thought the film-based argument was too strong of a controversy to touch on even more so I chose the mindset argument which was a lot harder to write, personally. He kinda persuaded me to lead towards the film-based argument because it was very powerful. He recommended that if I couldn't decide which one to go with, along with the hiraeth project, that I would write a second draft for both of these topics.
Trying to analyze my mindset argument again, was a lot more difficult the second time around. Looking at it again, to see, where it would need a touch up. Not because it is well written, but because I didn't know what else to add to make it sound more interesting. I thought about doing a draft on the film-based argument, and it felt like I had a lot more to say and more researched points that I can add onto it. I can shape up my points to be more argumentative without neglecting the other side of the argument and the facts they include as well. I may continue to do both drafts anyway if I get a brainstorm of ideas. However, I'm going to start with the film-based one first before I jump to the mindset one and still have writers block the day before its due. In this blog post, I will be responding to this questionnaire post below about Chef's Table: Francis Mallman.
Question #1: How does this episode fit into the narrative mode? Questions #2: How does Mallman's story connect to the hiraeth story you are writing in this class? Consider his discussions about home and childhood. Question #3: What major ideas/themes from this episode connect to ideas/themes from our composition course? Consider Mallmann's argument about composing a good dish, examining his life environments, and being productive. Telling a personal story about his childhood, he shows and tells his story. Tells a specific story about a specific scene. A scene is shown of his small kitchen. His kitchen. Alone in a single chair, facing a desk, ingredients stacked on a beat up shelf. He is stoking the flame of a wood-burning oven, pouring what looks like hot tea in a yellow cup, with a matching plate underneath. There is a small house he walks out of in the countryside. A single house on a small island. Sets a scene of him driving down a dirt road, waving to people on the side of the road of where he lives. He and his sister had a restaurant for about 15 years that she basically lived at. His sister loved that place. She can't return to it, because the memories takes a toll on her. “The feeling of Patagonia I feel, is my deepest rooted feeling for home.“ His home reminds him a lot of his childhood. He was first interested in music. He explains a scene of his childhood of when 4 girls from Australia played music from The Monkees and started dancing on top of a low table. He was stubborn about his freedom. He would dream about whatever he wanted. He creates his "chef's table" as decor, similar like his childhood. He talks about his childhood friendship and how growing up changed him to tell the truth and to show who you are. Explaining, it's okay to lose friendships. The memories they had, he will forever cherish, but they can't make the memories again, because they are at different points in their lives to continue a friendship over 30 years of passing. He related his cooking days a lot about being a cocky chef with a giant white hat. However, a chef once told him he was not making the right thing, just copying everything he learned. It weighed heavily on him, and he never forgot it, because that chef was right. He explained his cooking with his past. His argument about composing a good dish is what captured my attention and they way he looked at certain things of life. He explains the passion of making fires compared to making love. “It goes from zero to ten in strength. He talks about love with such a passion, however, showed he is divorced. You would think of love as loving one person for the rest of your life. He wants freedom of love. To love more than one person. He sees love as loving women as much as possible, without chasing girls left and right.He explains the process of living together, is feeling like a caged animal. He is explained as a hopeless romantic. He explains the process of cooking a steak. Gypsy of chefs, he doesn’t cook alone. They take young apprentices instead of experienced chefs. He likes creating leaders within these groups. "Maestranza" he said, means, "the people who are around you helping." He, however, doesn't like spending time with people he doesn't like. He very seldomly, invites people to eat with him. He used the environment around him, to create his food. After discussing with Professor Mangini about my progress as a student in his class, he gave me some great ideas to think about in my next draft. In my Hiraeth Narrative, I need to focus on a place more and create a scene with my grandfather. Use that same scene, to create the differences there are without him around. Think about my age and the person I was, when this occurred, and how I reacted at the age I was, and how “my home that I long for” could still affect me, knowing that it is no longer there. I took into consideration when he gave me the reading, “Two Ways to See a River” by Mark Twain. “I lost something, something that can never be restored to me while I lived. All the grace, the beauty, the poetry, had gone out of the majestic river.” He used words so powerfully descriptive, making me feel like I was witnessing this scene as well. So, I will use this technique, in hopes i do the same thing as well as set the same scene, as it was, and the difference it had on me when he, my grandfather, wasn’t there the second time.
|
Melanie
Here I will be blogging about my thoughts and ideas. Archives
May 2017
Categories
All
|